cancer anne, I am a stroke
(of the pen)
I'm not the books you read,
I'm in your shoes,
walking tomorrow night around like an ugly child.
Twister Anne, I am cancerous blood
blessed
be
thy
name,
and I live in hives
across minds
red with _________
drawing bulls like
a kite draws skies
right before the
tornado,
I'm in yours toes,
lighting up piano pedals, bringing the holy ghost:
The Ladies' Pocket
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sgnilbmert eht tcelfer
, stsohg fo
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pil reh setib
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lwin: "they told me about the
blueberry fields,
and how you gave them
to me, and were paved
over with black eyes
searching questions
for questionable
answers: : : :
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cancer anne, I am a GOAT,
and I howl cities of
smog and dimes:
"too crowded, too crowded Dreadful,
it's too crowded! They told me
about the blueberry fields,
and the black eyes stare,
where's my day out?
lily parr played football
and dick kerr made her a
lady"
Twister ANNE, I am you,
I give deaf children
pens for which to
write bleeding
smiles like
simple
sun
s
h
i
n
e
!!!!!!!
Dog Anne, The hills are moving, with no legs to stand on:
"I've got some legs,
so many legs,
so many feet,
I've been everywhere,
I've seen you,
with so many eyes,
I've got so many faces,
I breath oxygen,
And exhale grey,
Everything falls down
we've traded eyes
now let's trade legs,
I've got some legs,
So many, many legs"
if you never wake up, what heaven would it be worth?
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Comments
I like this alot.
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Swish.
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a. crow cowboy candycane ghost(hh)
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a. crow cowboy candycane ghost(hh)
What to say then? This is brilliant writing. Like Ezekiel vs. The Pagan Hordes of Futurism on top of Mount Carmel. There's so much energy and urgency in your writing: it's as if you really had seen visions of the Apocalypse (have you?!)! It's not just so much bluster though: the quality and originality of the language and imagery is outstanding. I love phrases such as "drawing bulls like / a kite draws skies / right before the / tornado" and "I howl cities / of smog and dimes".
Of course, your typography is very striking, but it never seems gimmicky, it's always with a clear purpose and always serves the poem rather than hijacking it.
My one gripe is with the way that extended metaphor of sickness developed in the first couple of stanzas ("cancer", "stroke", "cancerous blood") is abruptly dropped. There's no rule to say that such metaphors have to be continued all the way through the piece, but I think in this case it may help to have another consistent strand to keep things tied together, as the poem careers through all kinds of disassociated imagery. However, maybe I'm wrong here maybe one of the things that makes this poem so successful is exactly that disjointedness and chaos. Not sure!
Anyway, great writing!
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